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Before:
"The purpose of this evaluation of XXX's current NRF programme, was to assess the performance of the current portfolio of NRF-funded projects against these Key Principles. It was also intended that this evaluation should assess XXX's NRF Programme, and individual projects within it, against national guidelines for the use of NRF funding.
XXX's LSP Board has to date focussed its efforts and NRF resources against 4 specific Floor Target areas: Health, Crime, Worklessness, and Education, and this evaluation of project strategic fit and performance is therefore focussed upon these 4 particular areas.
It was intended that this evaluation should, amongst other outcomes, make detailed recommendations, based upon evaluation against the Key Principles above, as to those projects which should continue to be supported by NRF beyond 2005/6, and those from which NRF funding support should be withdrawn from the start of the 2006/7 funding year.
It was also intended that, in the case of projects recommended for continued NRF support, the evaluation should also provide recommendations on any further project-specific issues of project design and delivery identified through the evaluative process." (183 words)
Rewrite (65% shorter):
"XXX's LSP Board asked us to assess its NRF programme against a set of key principles and the national guidelines for NRF funding.
We looked at four areas where resources have been concentrated: health, crime, worklessness and education. We then gave advice on which projects should continue to be funded beyond 2005/6 and additional advice on how to improve design and delivery through evaluation." (64 words)